Thứ Sáu, 30 tháng 10, 2009

Name:Đào Mỹ Ngọc Linh
Class:081202A
ID number:08120086

Rain

When the rain coming, everyone ran in a hurry to look for a place to keep out of the rain drops falling more and more quickly,much more and more. I also find a place to hide. The first time I had a chance to observe a rain such attentively like that.

The first thing was the specific smell of the soil, which recalled the rains in our childhood in the countryside, a lot of memories suddenly came back, the rain was more and more heavy and much more made small currents of water flew zigzag like the small snacks playing tag. For a little while, these small currents became bigger and bigger when them made up. It flew strongly and washed away the obstacles on its way. Soon, The surface of the roads are full of water, the plants are flooded in the water, bend their body to the currents, they looked bare and seemed to try to adhere to the soil. And the big trees let the old branches and leaves leave them, fell onto the road and seemed to sustain the strong wind. Everything seemed to fight to protect itself. The scenery looked terrible. However, the scenery disappeared completely after the rain.
A brand new picture was painted full of colours. The sudden change of everything made us a little bit amazed but not regretful, it seemed that we have just missed something interesting. First, the sky was brighter and bluer, had a lot sunshine and also the air became cooler and more easeful. The strong water of a moment ago carried away all dust, rubbish on the body of plants, trees ,showed a fresh green, one of the major colours of the picture, and cleaned the roads,too. The special thing, the most wonderful thing of picture after the rain was the rainbow. The beauty of the rainbow brings us the safe, peaceful feelings when looking. The picture was really an art masterpiece of the nature for the humans.

In the modern life today, we are busy with a lot of work, family and the social relationship, which makes us really tired. Therefore, we forget there are still wonderful things, exist for us without paying any money or anything to buy. Slow your life down even a little to enjoy another life.

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  1. * grammar, vocabulary, development: A, ideas:A+
    * introductory paragraph: A
    * development: A
    *I think if you put the sentence "However the scenery disappeared completely after rain" into second body paragraph, it will be better.
    *In conclusion, you must mention rain again.

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  2. INTRODUCTION (2ms)
    - Background, hook 1
    - Thesis statement 1
    BODY (4.5ms)
    - Good ideas 2
    - Coherence, unity, development 2
    - Language: Grammar, vocabulary (1)
    CONCLUSION (2ms)
    - Summarize (1)
    - Lesson, suggestions (1)
    Total: 9

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